Can you look over this small scene for me??????

The waves of the sea wash over me. I clutch my head in pain. My heart broken, and nausea in my stomach. My legs are soaked from the water, my body shivering, but I feel nothing. I'm numb. It's over. I collapse fully on the rocky ground of the beach, the pale light of the moon bathing my bare back. Sobs rack my body, but no tears fall from my eyes. Why? Why? Does this have to hurt so much? I never really loved him. Did I? I push myself to my knees, slowly standing, I feel myself wading into the deeper waters of the sea. My body becoming colder and colder. I feel as if I'm in a trance, I have no control of my body. A deep song calls me deeper and deeper into the water. My head soon submerges, I know that I should be gasping for breath. But strangely, I feel as if I could stay under forever. My dress billows around me pulling me under. My feet walk along the bottom. Ahead I see a faint light. A crude shape of something. I feel no fear. I can hear the song coming from that direction. Calling me like a sirens song. My body moves languidly in the water, my feet moving without my knowing. Soon I am but a few feet away from the golden light. The song has gotten quieter and quieter. I strain to hear the song. My heart longing for the cool numbness it invokes. I move close to the light, my ears straining to catch the last strains of the melody. As the song comes to an end, my lungs start to burn, and I struggle. Hands grip my struggling limbs, holding me under. My body feeling so heavy. My limbs trapped.